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Wednesday, December 6, 2017

Aboriginal Art

Once upon a time there's was four aboriginal tribes and they all were starving for emu, the problem was that there wasn't many emus left. But there was a giant emu that was walking around the bush but it was way too big and when I say big I mean huge! So that meant the couldent hunt it down. Then they had an idea, the idea was for all the tribes to join together and ambush the emu, so they did. All of the tribe members kept throwing there hunting boomerangs at the emu and eventually the emu fell to the ground and that was enough to feed all four tribes for a year.


Wednesday, November 29, 2017

My Box Poem

I will put in my box
A piece of the propeller from the Titanic
A signature from Usain Bolt
A pair of Yeezys SPLY- 350 with an orange stripe
I will put into my box
A golden nugget that I found on the river bed
The bullet that shot John F Kennedy
The hook that I caught my biggest fish with
I will put in my box
A 1000 year old jelly bean
A piece of cheese from the moon
A snowflake that never melts
I will put in my box
A  dinosaur egg that hasn't hatched yet
My first tooth that I lost
A fidget spinner that never stops spinning
My box is fashioned by gold and diamonds
Its hinges are made by titanium with carbon fibre on the outside
I will break the world speed record on water

Monday, November 27, 2017

The A&P show

Last week our class was making an A&P show presentation, these are the things that I put on it.

The first thing that I put on it was the ride, for the ride we had to design our own amusement ride for the A&P show so here is my ride.


 The second thing I did was the A&P show history. We had to research stuff about the A&P show, like who created the A&P show and other questions like that.
 My last activity was the animals, for the animals you had to pick an animal that you saw at the show then you had to find out stuff about the animal.
 After I completed all of the activities we had to be put in groups and present our presentations to our group. We also had a pair assessor to give us feedback, myn was Tegan. Here is my feedback from him.
I would like some feedback for this blog post and maybe if you learnt something new you could tell me what you learnt.



Tuesday, November 7, 2017

The Ocean Maker

This is my blog post about The ocean maker so can I please have some feedback?

This is the process I went throw.
So first I had to watch the video, here is the video if you want to watch it.(click here)
Second my class and I had to brain storm about the video make a plan, here is the picture.
Third I had to make a plan, here is the picture.
Fourth I had to make the storey on my computer, here is the storey if you want to read it.
The Ocean maker
In the boiling hot desert that used to be a ocean There were ship wrecked sail boats, aircraft carriers and submarines. There was also a lighthouse that was on a pile of rocks, that used to be a tiny piece of island to fit the lighthouse on it. So I went for a search for the rain maker in my very old bi-plane.
So I took off in it and flew around the desert for a rain maker to fill the the desert up with water So that there was an ocean again.
I was also trying to find out how all the water just disappeared like that.
After 30 mins of searching two of the engines failed and the other two were too old to keep the plane in the air so it was heading right into the side of a rocky mountain

Then the plane exploded on the mountain and I died.
Fifth I had to get a buddy to give me feedback, here is the feedback sheet, now I need you to give me feedback!
Name     Saxon                                                                 Peer Marker: isaac w
Success Criteria - Narrative
Features of Text
Student
Peer
  • I have included a beginning, middle and an end.


  • I have created a setting by showing with my words or using who, what, when & where.


  • I have included a problem & solved it (or created good tension)


  • I have written a satisfying ending.


  • I have written in either 1st person or 3rd person.


  • I have used descriptive language throughout  (sets of 3, alliteration, similes, personification, metaphors) and provided detail to my story.


  • I have used a range sequencing connectives. (time words or phrases)


My Personal Target/s:



What I think I did well: I used paragraphs
What my partner thinks I’ve done well: he did a lot of paragraphs.
What I think I need to improve next time: using more Ispace
What my partner thinks I need to improve next time: same more ispace.


Friday, October 20, 2017

Uru manuka (Feedback)

     This week have had to make an Uru manuka logo so can I please have some feedback.